Critiques wanted!
Peter
I mopped my brow with the front of my shirt, frowning with distaste when I found the crimson fabric to be rather damp. I pushed my shaggy hair out of my face, but stray brown locks clung to my forehead, plastered there by the moisture.
“Uungh,” I groaned miserably, my limbs splayed out over the baking grass. “It's too hot.”
Quit complaining, my companion chided. The barn owl was perched on a barren and dying shrub across from me, her deep purple gaze regarding me sternly but not unkindly.
“I have every right to complain,” I protested. “You can't feel this heat!”
I can sense your displeasure, the owl stated. You know that. You're acting all sour, and it's making it hard for me to concentrate!
“You wanna feel this?” I challenged, handing her the full brunt of the awful heat. Sweet, unfeeling relief flooded through me; consequently, my partner gained the ability to touch.
Aaaaah! she shouted. Take it back, take it back!
“Too much for you?” I asked with a smug grin. I felt her trying to push the sense back to me, but I adamantly refused. I was in control at the moment. “Maaan,” I said with a content sigh, “you guys got it good for times like this!”
Take. It. Back! I gave no response. Please? More silence. Okay, okay, I admit it! You have every right to complain, and I'll stop bugging you!
“That's more like it.” I reached through our mind link and reclaimed the sense. “Now that that's out of the way,” I began, “how have you been progressing?”
Well, until that little interruption, I had been tracking a new scent. This one's a doozy. The target just reeks of soul! My concentration was disrupted, of course, but an anomaly like that shouldn't be hard to latch onto again. We have to find this one as soon as possible, because if it were that easy for me to find, I'd hate to think about how quickly they could find it.
“Mm. Looks like you've got some work to do, Sesria!” Then, in a more serious tone, I added, “I really want to beat them this time.”
Right.
I closed my eyes and allowed my thoughts to wander as my friend delved into the depths of the universe.
I've found the target, she announced after a few minutes.
“That was fast. Although, if the scent is as strong as you say it is, I suppose I shouldn't be surprised. Where are we headed, then?”
Not too far; it's a plane pretty close to the one we're on.
“Alright. Are you ready, Ses?”
As I'll ever be.
“Okay.” I took a deep breath and a moment of mental preparation. Closing my eyes, I focused on my soul and the bond between Sesria and me. “Preparing to jump in three.”
Two.
“One,” we spoke together.
With a blinding blue and white light and an earsplitting crack, we left the field as empty as we had found it.
And sure, I'll keep you updated ^_^